FOR PART ONE OF BALLADEER’S BLOG’S EXAMINATION OF THIS OLD, OLD MARVEL STORYLINE CLICK HERE  The revisions I would make are scattered throughout the synopsis below.

Killraven four mutant slayersAMAZING ADVENTURES Vol 2 # 21 (November 1973)


Synopsis: Another issue means ANOTHER change in creative team for this promising but star-crossed series. This fourth change in four issues gives us Don McGregor as the writer and Herb Trimpe as the artist.

McGregor will stay and will handily develop the flowery prose that also characterized his run on the 13-part Black Panther story Panther’s Rage, previously reviewed here at Balladeer’s Blog. Unfortunately, Don’s writing in this issue is as hopelessly lame and “comic bookish” as Herb Trimpe’s artwork.

We are told that the Martians had their human quislings – in this case led by a human cyborg called the Warlord – transport Killraven and his Freemen, who were ambushed and captured last issue amid the ruins of LaGuardia Airport, to this new underground base. The base’s location is undisclosed for now.

REVISION: Given Riker’s Island’s proximity to LaGuardia Airport I would have made THAT the location that the captive Freemen were transported to. And given the island’s use as a prison before the alien conquest of Earth it would be ideal for my revised storyline.

I would make the Warlord be specifically Warlord RYKER as in Simon Ryker (no relation to the island’s namesake). Simon Ryker was, of course, the main villain in Deathlok (sic) the Demolisher, another of Marvel’s promising but short-lived sci-fi comic books of the 1970s.

DeathlokI’m combining Deathlok’s story with Killraven’s in a sort of Ultimate Killraven way, since Marvel in recent years had KR, Deathlok and other figures from their canceled post-apocalypse titles get thrown together as a team due to time anomalies, etc ANYWAY.

Warlord Ryker would still hate Killraven for causing the loss and cybernetic replacement of his (Ryker’s) arm and eye during his escape from the gladiatorial pens a few years earlier.

Back to the real story, the Warlord and his fellow quisling Carmilla Frost (in her first-ever appearance) are watching several waves of guards struggling to shepherd Killraven along to join his Freemen in their new prison cells. Expository dialogue makes it clear that Keeper Frost is a molecular biologist and, like all the other Keepers, she is a scientist who sold out her fellow Earth people in exchange for privileges. Mostly, access to the Martians’ advanced science to continue their work.

The Warlord rants a great deal about how he warned the Martians to execute Killraven years ago, but he was such a good fighter in their gladiatorial games that they kept him alive for sport. Eventually the Warlord knocks out KR from behind.

REVISION: As always, I’d have jettisoned the tenuous War of the Worlds connection by getting rid of the ridiculous Martians and just made it regular aliens – say from the Zeta Reticuli area of space – who had conquered Earth.

Carmilla FrostInstead of watching Killraven struggle against guards I would have Warlord Ryker and Carmilla Frost watching and taking notes as other Keepers subject the rebel leader to various tests – many of them painful, of course – to determine the nature and origin of his paranormal abilities called simply The Power in the first two issues. (This was 4 years BEFORE Star Wars, so The Power is NOT a ripoff of The Force.)    

Warlord Ryker, Carmilla Frost and the other Keepers would be refusing to tell Killraven what they’ve done with his Freemen. After re-establishing – for the sake of first-time readers – that The Power allows KR to – among other things – mentally render himself undetectable to the alarm sensors of the aliens, they would anesthetize him for now. They would say they are doing that to probe his subconscious mind to find out what damaging information Keeper Whitman told him about Earth’s conquerors before he died.

Back in the real story, when Killraven comes to, the Warlord – who should have heeded his own advice and slain KR while he was knocked out and helpless – instead has our hero strapped to an operating table to be the latest surgical guinea pig for those Keepers who are trying to bioengineer new bodies for the Martians. Those new bodies will be immune to Earth’s germs and will be strong enough for the Martians to move around more freely in Earth’s greater gravity.

The Warlord orders the Keepers NOT to use anesthetic on Killraven when they begin the actual surgery several minutes from now. Leaving them to finish their prep work, he departs with Carmilla.

REVISION: While KR was out I would cut to show the plight of his captured Freemen. To explain: Warlord Ryker and Carmilla Frost have been experimenting on using dead Earth soldiers, slain during the initial war against the invading aliens, as overhauled cyborgs a la Deathlok. The original plan was to use them against the invading aliens, but after Earth fell, the project was seized upon by the aliens – Zetans in my revision. 

Those preserved corpses- turned-cyborgs would be used to replace hundreds of thousands of quisling soldiers, who in turn would be freed-up to be used as gladiators or food for the aliens, who DO feed upon humans, as we learned in the first chapter. Ryker still thinks these cyborgs are in the testing stage, little dreaming that Carmilla has secretly perfected one she calls Deathlok (who, obviously, would replace her creation Grok in my revised version of events).

Supposedly to help tweak and perfect the undead cyborg fighting machines/ super soldiers, Ryker and Carmilla would be watching tests/ proving runs pitting partially completed “Deathloks” against the captive Freemen, who are slated for execution anyway.

One at a time the Freemen – all of them former gladiators like Killraven – would be facing the cyborgs in these test runs as the Keepers and Warlord Ryker take notes on various adjustments that need made to the cyborgs’ fighting ability.

The first Freeman thus used: we’ll say the female Dagger, since the Freeman called Dagger has simply been forgotten about by the writers at this point and has vanished. The other captive Freemen – M’Shulla, Hawk, Old Skull and Arrow (that last one also turned female in my revision) – watch on viewscreens as Dagger fights.

The odds are video-game impossible. As Dagger defeats one cyborg, two more are set loose on her. After she defeats them, three more attack. After defeating two of these three cyborgs, the third one manages to kill her before she can best it. (Four more would have been unleashed if she had) The Freemen are infuriated by this and long to avenge their slain comrade. Ryker calmly recommends improvements to the cyborgs’ programming.   

Before the next Freeman can be sent out to face the prototype Deathloks, Warlord Ryker is urgently summoned by the Zetans probing Killraven’s subconscious. The test-runs pitting Freemen against cyborgs are paused while Ryker obeys the summons.

Back in the real story, Carmilla Frost tries to convince the Warlord to keep Killraven alive and intact in order to use him to smoke out other groups of Freemen for capture. (If you’re new to KR stories, yes, that lame excuse means Carmilla has been pondering betraying the Martians and helping Earth’s rebels. She’s just been waiting for the right moment and for the right potential leader to come along.)

The Warlord resists the notion, saying if Killraven is left alive and whole “he’ll bury us all.” We are shown the imprisoned Freemen. M’Shulla is trying to bash the cell door down (REVISION: It should be the simple-minded brute Old Skull doing that). It’s not working and he banters with Hawk and Old Skull about the urgent need to escape and save their leader Killraven.

Carmilla Frost has slipped into her laboratory and, deciding it’s now or never, she unleashes her monstrous creation Grok. (SPOILER: In an unnecessary mystery it turns out several issues down the road that Grok is really Carmilla’s father. The Martians forced her to experiment on him to prove she had cut all ties with humanity, but in so doing they sowed the seeds of her betrayal of them.)

ANOTHER NOTE TO STAR WARS FANS: Yes, Grok may be monstrous and incredibly strong and unable to speak English but he is NOT a Chewbacca ripoff like so many of you often claim. 1973 came before 1977, when Star Wars was released. 

REVISION: While Warlord Ryker goes off to see what the Zetans need to urgently tell him, Carmilla uses the opportunity to sneak off to her lab. In my revision she frees Deathlok, her secretly-completed cyborg warrior. And what the hell, we’ll have HIM turn out to be her dead father Luther down the road. Maybe she came across his corpse among the dead experimental subjects she was working on and the emotional trauma fueled her plans to betray the aliens by perfecting HIM and using him as a weapon against them.

Anyway, Carmilla also arms Deathlok with the secretly developed laser-gun connected by a cord to his backpack charger. Deathlok’s tormented memories of the Vietnam War in which he was killed in his 1970s comic book will be converted in THESE stories into tormented memories of humanity’s futile war against the invading aliens instead.  

Carmilla and Grok arrive to set the Freemen loose from their cell. She then leads them to where they can free Killraven, who engages in pointless battle of the sexes bickering with Carmilla. Anyway, with Carmilla and Grok at their side, KR and his rebel band fight their way to the surface while the Warlord snivels ineffectually. (Seriously, they might as well have had him whining “Why me? Why me alla time?”)

We readers are shown that the subterranean lab was underneath Yankee Stadium and the emerging Freemen now take the diamond to fight a bunch of mutates and mutants unleashed on them by the Warlord. This whole Yankee Stadium bit COULD have been handled well, but here it’s just barely at Kamandi or Planet of the Apes (the cartoon series) levels of lameness. 

Our heroes succeed in killing all the creatures, following which the Warlord attacks Killraven, who defeats him and destroys his arm again. He and the other Freemen don’t bother killing him, though, as he wanders around whining some more. (Like Skarlet, the leader of the Sirens a few chapters back, the Warlord is never seen again, so they might as well have had the rebels kill him.)

With Carmilla and Grok joining them, the Freemen leave the stadium.

REVISION: Carmilla and Deathlok free M’Shulla, Old Skull, Hawk and Arrow. Frost also provides the Freemen with all of their signature weapons, which were stashed nearby for their upcoming fights with the cyborgs.

Back with Warlord Ryker and the Zetans, the aliens inform Ryker that it is as they feared: the dying Keeper Whitman made it clear to Killraven that they are aliens, not demons or dark gods as the conquered masses – kept uneducated by the Zetans – superstitiously thought previously. Even worse, Whitman confirmed that the Nobility are really just human traitors who sold out to Earth’s alien overlords.

However, above and beyond even that, “The Power” as Keeper Whitman called it, seems very dangerous to the Zetans PERSONALLY. Plus the probing of Killraven’s subconscious has revealed that Whitman implanted buried memories of humanity’s past and cultural heritage from before the alien invasion: a past and heritage that the Zetans have done their best to destroy.  

The Zetans tell Warlord Ryker that they need to keep KR alive until they determine if there is more to be uncovered, but they will amputate his arms and legs to ensure he is never again a physical threat, just in case the worst happens. On cue, the Freemen plus Carmilla and Deathlok burst in.   

To avenge the slain Dagger, the Freemen slaughter the Zetans and their human quisling soldiers while Ryker flees. Carmilla frees the groggy Killraven and, rather than engage in trite battle of the sexes bickering like in the orginal story, I would revive the almost-Luddite levels of distrust for science that the Freemen felt in the first chapter. That distrust was due to the way  so many scientists sold out humanity.

KR would be wary of Carmilla because she’s a scientist and not because she’s a woman. She would restore all his weapons too, like she did with his Freemen, to try to gain his trust. (Those weapons: His sword, photo-nuclear pistol and his explosive throwing-stars.)  

As our heroes all try to flee, Warlord Ryker would unleash the imperfect cyborg soldiers against them. While the rebels engage in a running fight with them, Ryker would be setting loose all of the lab’s mutates and mutants (being created for use in the gladiatorial contests).

Our “good guys” would wipe out all those beasts, too, by now up on the surface level of Riker’s Island. Killraven would defeat Warlord Ryker and destroy his arm again. He would escape back below the surface, following which explosions – which Carmilla would say she set up – would wipe out everything below ground. It would be unclear if Ryker himself had survived.

An escape would be made by our surviving heroes: Killraven, M’Shulla, Old Skull, Hawk, Carmilla Frost, Deathlok and Arrow.

NOTE: I’d have titled this part The Body Shop, referring to the assorted bioengineering going on at the issue’s labs, if not for the fact that that title was already taken in Marvel Comics.  









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  2. Rolland

    wonderful idea to substitute Deathlok for Grok!

  3. Chris

    Incredible revision! Loved the addition of Deathlok!

  4. Mel

    Damn right Deathlok would fit in better than useless Grok!

  5. Daniel

    Your ultimate Killraven with Deathlok would be better than this.

  6. Jeff

    Your inclusion of Deathlok as the replacement for Grok is inspired! That would have been so great!

  7. Cara

    How could you call Old Skull a ‘simple minded brute’! Just because he doesn’t talk too much doesn’t mean he’s simple minded and just because he’s strong doesn’t mean he’s a brute!

    AND NO I DO NOT HAVE A CRUSH ON HIM. He just looks better than the others and behaves better too. Plays the flute etc.

    • Well, unfortunately they DO definitely say he is mentally challenged at one point. And then there’s his whole way of speaking like “Old Skull doesn’t think that’s a good idea. Mister Killraven. He surely doesn’t.” But I guess you’re into guys who refer to themselves in the third person. (I’m kidding!)

      • Cara

        Aww… that’s sad. Because he seems to be the most normal wholesome character of them all.

        I think speaking of oneself in the third person is a sort of trauma response – trying to see the situation from a third person point of view. It helps sometimes. I don’t think it should be considered a sign of mental retardation.

      • I was just kidding about the way he speaks. But yeah, Old Skull is a fan favorite because of his tenderness and vulnerability and the way his respect for Killraven makes him call him “Mister Killraven” no matter how many times KR tells him he can drop the “Mister.”

  8. Cara

    The bit in your revision where they were going to cut off KR’s limbs was very scary.

    Initially when I was reading the Killraven posts I was puzzled by your revisions. You seem so passionate about them, and I understood it was because you expected a certain standard of credibility, and adherence to themes common in this genre of fiction.

    What’s interesting to me is how all your buttons the writers of Killraven managed to push are all the points they wanted to get attention to.

    For example they keep going south and you keep insisting they ought to be going west. That’s huge. It means something.

    “I would revive the almost-Luddite levels of distrust for science that the Freemen felt in the first chapter. That distrust was due to the way so many scientists sold out humanity.”

    That was nice.

    I was thinking of how you say you would have the aliens try to find out what Keeper Whitman told KR.

    I think you’re projecting your intelligence on the aliens.

    The series shows them as having so much over-confidence in themselves, and their technology full of holes, and such overweening contempt for humans that they cannot consider them knowing anything as a threat.

    The series shows aliens as having established a sort of rule with a system – but gotten so rusty in it that their attention was now all taken up by making their prototype so they could survive physically.

    Concerns like the dangers caused by what the few enslaved humans knew or didn’t know don’t seem to penetrate through their obsession with immediate physical survival.

    • Well, you give the revolving door of writers this series had at the beginning more credit than I do. As for the “west” thing, they ARE trying to get to Yellowstone Park, after all, and they know it’s in the west. That’s how they get from Washington DC in a few chapters to Indiana, then Michigan and Wisconsin with adventures along the way. As you read the next few chapters you’ll see what I mean. The High Overlord taunts Killraven with the information that his long lost brother Joshua is at the Yellowstone Park alien fortress.

      By the way, I can’t wait to hear your interpretation of the Washington DC chapters. It’s a three part story beginning in part 5. Your way of analyzing them is so interesting!

      • Cara

        Oh ok, so they do go West then, they just linger about.

        About writers, my understanding is that it’s quite routine for publishers to have a story-line that they give various different writers to write out for publication.

        I’ve stopped believing that the writer of something is the creative source of the subject or even the story.

        With something of the depth of the Killraven story, I suspect the original source is a human somewhere that hasn’t been given credit. I might be wrong, but I suspect that the writers were told, to stick with certain elements of the story despite them not making sense, because the original source of the material, was someone the publishers believed had an instinct for what would touch people.

        I think that’s why Killraven ‘works’ despite its eccentricities.

        Anyone in the 70s could’ve come up with a believable story but it takes something more to come up with something that speaks subconsciously to people and which is still read and spoken of decades later.

        Look at how much ‘sensible’ stuff is put into the rubbish bins of history everyday.

        I’ll be reading part 5 next, unless you post something that distracts me before I get to it.

      • I guess we will probably never know for sure, but I do like your interpretations of the stories. It’s always interesting.

  9. Colin

    Excellent change! Dam rite Deathlok should have been one of the Freemen!

  10. Ulysses

    Deathlok would have been a cool Freeman!

  11. Neil

    It might as well have been Deathlok considering how little Don McGregor did with Grok.

  12. Werner

    You wasted too much time on a series nobody cared about.

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